I am a fan of your series of books, and am happy that you have saught to continual improve upon them with your 'Director's Cut' version. You have done a great job cutting the unneeded fat from your series and have improved upon them! I have cheered you outloud while reading your 'Director's Cut', as I have noticed many of the improvements I wished to have seen actually implemented (Removing fat, re-organizing, re-sizing and choosing a better font, clarifying imformation, introducing new information.)
Though I do have some critism with the current Building Worlds and Building Adventure's. For Building Worlds you failed to clarify what type of premise is being created and for what purpose initially. You state "A premise summarizes your setting in a single sentence... etc" yet, you then go to mention Goals, Characters, and Obstacles. From reading past works, I know that the type of premise being creatd is what a chracter within the particular story would be accomplishing and for you to extract details from that. If it wasn't for that, I personally would stay confused.
For Building Adventurer's book, the tone and wording of what you are suggesting to the reader makes me feel as if you would be more accurately suggesting information for a campaign rather then an singular adventure. Then, when I came upon the Campaign chapter of the book, I thought to myself "So far it really felt like everything was refering to the entire campaign."
Though I do have these criticisms and I do feel that there is still room for improvement, you have certainly improved on your series. I am happy that you are keeping to your guns presenting your books in the unique format that you have. I am happy to have something different in my collection of books and not just the same thing that other people have created.
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